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this sun-kissed heart,
this raven haired girl,
        -dainty birch wrists
she will never be a poet

i look out the window (and i goddamn miss you)
a million miles apart
and wish that
these mountain ridge ribs,
battered by the rain i used to dance in (with you)
could be loved again, told
i will always find you
i will always love you
i will always need you
at 2am, your heart against my chest
staring at the moon

i can't prove anything anymore

but this shadow-drowned heart
this bloodshot eyed girl
          -flesh engraved with your name
maybe one day she will be a poet
(don't get mad over spilled tears, you never should have had emotions in the first place)
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:iconseabit:
Seabit Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are my favourite poetess
wow
just WOW ;v; <3
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Student Writer
WHAT NO DON"T SAY tHAT I DON"T DESERVE WATCHERS LIKE YOU
THANK YOUUUUUU
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:iconseabit:
Seabit Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
YOU DO, A MILLION TIMES

AHH you're welcome!!!!! <3
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Student Writer
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay, I was given this piece for review by LitCritiques. This being my first time critiquing poetry, I apologize in advance for anything stupid I say.

Okay, on to the good stuff! The imagery was pretty clear and easy to visualize, and the poem in general did a good job of drawing me into its world. I could feel the emotions emanating from this piece pretty clearly.

Now to the negatives...I don't really have anything to say regarding improvement (you can write a whole lot better than me), and the only thing I can criticize is your lack of capitalization, but that's just me being nitpicky. You did a great job with this.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student Writer
thank you for your critique! i never use capitalization lol
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's okay. Like I said, I was just being real picky there. :)
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
good poem Rose!
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Writer
thank you <3 are you participating in NaPoWriMo too?
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
no, I have no idea what that is 
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